Thread:Romulus Ravenclaw/@comment-31690265-20180817182607/@comment-24081778-20180911002929

I find it pretty interesting how you chose to depict werewolves. Obvious Aphmau inspiration aside, the part about the arent being put down by a misunderstanding as well as the fact that Aqua was oblvious to other werewolves is fascinating for character development.

On the negative side, you've used little to no paragraphs and made sral speeling mistakes. The characters also talk like they're saying everything in one breath and explain a lot more than they need to. I just noticed that it says book two, so a brief summary at the beginning may be all you need to cover the essential backstory.

This is neither a positive nor a negative, just an idea: To make the speech lines stand out more, try having them each on their own line. It's also a fast way to make the book longer.